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To Avry....
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I knew not you, or whence you came,
But I see that we, in most, are same;
To all - I jump to know her name,
And so I toast my Avry.
Right, forward, left, and back...
Were we, perhaps, close friends since birth?
I marvel at our friendship's mirth,
And place on all no equal worth -
And so I toast my Avry.
Right, forward, left, and back...
To you, dark poet, God's love I send,
And mark you ever as my friend -
I pray our waltz may never end:
And so I toast you, Avry.
Right, forward, left, and back...
But I see that we, in most, are same;
To all - I jump to know her name,
And so I toast my Avry.
Right, forward, left, and back...
Were we, perhaps, close friends since birth?
I marvel at our friendship's mirth,
And place on all no equal worth -
And so I toast my Avry.
Right, forward, left, and back...
To you, dark poet, God's love I send,
And mark you ever as my friend -
I pray our waltz may never end:
And so I toast you, Avry.
Right, forward, left, and back...
One minor disclaimer...THIS IS NOT A FREAKING LOVE POEM!!! god knows i finished with that two years ago...come to think of it, two years to the day.
I dedicate this poem to a very good friend and fellow deviant, Avry. It makes me retch to think of continuing life without her baleful influence in my life.
Now...let's see if i can do this correctly...for those who want to see her in her deviant glory - *Avry
The R,F,L, &B betwixt each verse is the basic box step for a waltz...-----
Edit 2-10-05: thanks to a fellow deviant sn Yaanon, i have learned that saying "from whence" is redundant. so i have mercifully deleted the word from in the first verse, and so have improved both me lexicon and my writing quality...Thank you, Yaanon.
I dedicate this poem to a very good friend and fellow deviant, Avry. It makes me retch to think of continuing life without her baleful influence in my life.
Now...let's see if i can do this correctly...for those who want to see her in her deviant glory - *Avry
The R,F,L, &B betwixt each verse is the basic box step for a waltz...-----
Edit 2-10-05: thanks to a fellow deviant sn Yaanon, i have learned that saying "from whence" is redundant. so i have mercifully deleted the word from in the first verse, and so have improved both me lexicon and my writing quality...Thank you, Yaanon.
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See? Having the whole poem rhyme doesn't make it sound limerick-y. 'Twas very good, I liked how you added the waltz steps. With your cast off, you can actually preform them! Though I did have one problem, however, with the first line. "or from whence you came." Since whence means "from where", its like saying "from from where you came". However, as the dictionary says "The construction from whence has been criticized as redundant since the 18th century. It is true that whence incorporates the sense of from: a remote village, whence little news reached the wider world. But from whence has been used steadily by reputable writers since the 14th century, most notably in the King James Bible: “I will lift up mine eyes unto the hills, from whence cometh my help” (Psalms). Such a respectable precedent makes it difficult to label the construction as incorrect. Still, it may be observed that whence (like thence) is most often used nowadays to impart an archaic or highly formal tone to a passage, and that this effect is probably better realized if the archaic syntax of the wordwithout fromis preserved as well." You're free to write what you wish, but I just am a sucker for correct archaic usage.