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This is the first of the eye series I'm currently working on. I just bought a scanner and waiting for it to come in the mail. As soon as I get it I will post a better copy.
If anyone has any feedback or tips they would like to give, please I always want to know how I could improve my work
I think next time I will work on a larger piece of paper so I can get it to look more sharp. You can see too much paper texture.
The original
by Serena Star 
Model:
7 hours
This is about the actual size of the drawing
Smooth Bristol
Prismacolor graphite 6H 2H HB 3B 7B
8B Woodless graphite pencil
Tissue
Blending stump
White eraser
Kneaded Eraser
If anyone has any feedback or tips they would like to give, please I always want to know how I could improve my work
I think next time I will work on a larger piece of paper so I can get it to look more sharp. You can see too much paper texture.
The original
by Serena Star Model:
7 hours
This is about the actual size of the drawing
Smooth Bristol
Prismacolor graphite 6H 2H HB 3B 7B
8B Woodless graphite pencil
Tissue
Blending stump
White eraser
Kneaded Eraser
Image size
800x640px 294.42 KB
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Comments83
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Overall Vision
Originality Technique ImpactAh, my first DA critique!
I can say nothing bad about your proportions or overall composition!
You've pushed your dark darks and you've got light lights. There's an admirable range of value here that gives this piece its POP.
Awesome AWESOME texture! You've nailed the feel of the mascara on the eyelashes, the skin of the eye lid, and the shininess of the eyeball and surrounding tissue!
The detail and attention you gave to each individual eyelash, the reflection on the eye itself, and the tiny imperfections of the iris are OUTSTANDING. I have a feeling that the photo of your drawing doesn't do it justice. Are those tiny veins near the inner corner!? Sheesh!
Personally I would prefer to see the value continue beyond the eye and off the edges of the paper. This is a personal preference though. With so much time already in, I can see why you would want to stop there. As opposed to taking the risk of adding something that would take away from, or eclipse, the work that you have put into it.