No you should keep them! I think they help sell the humor of it. The "It's only 9:00 AM" bit was elevated by it.
i know, but didnt i overdo with the comedy elements? It's a sad story after all...
It wasn't overdone, especially since the comedy disappears as the story goes on and gets more serious.
great, it's waht i intended☺ thank again for feedback<3
